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1Kings Game Empty Kings Game Sun Sep 08, 2013 9:39 pm

Diabetic Panda

Diabetic Panda

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Boom! Done! I even changed the title. This is the official story for In the Wild, but no it's Kings Game. ^^ I hope you guys like it! Also I changed the beginning a bit, so re-read that. Also that is not a spoiler, I swear. I'm just bad with little boxes.

Chapter 1: Grand Reunion

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Chapter 2: Grand Reunion pt.2

Spoiler:
  



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2Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Sun Sep 08, 2013 9:55 pm

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Cool story bro

3Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Mon Sep 09, 2013 12:06 am

Diabetic Panda

Diabetic Panda

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Boom! Two chapters in one day. Yay. Please read and critique. Thanks for reading!

4Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Fri Sep 13, 2013 12:53 pm

Devan

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I see that you added to the 1st chapter. I guess I will re-read it when I can. By the way, go to Jason for titles; you suck.

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5Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Fri Sep 13, 2013 1:07 pm

! Evilswarm Ophion

! Evilswarm Ophion

Kings Game EFS6eLa

"First tag to be opened gets closed last."

Using that information and the BBCode capability, you should style your story so the text isn't so boring. When someone looks at a post, they want to read a post that looks attractive and well organized. This is even more true for articles and fan-fictions. Even so, I guess the story maters most. I will read this very soon. It's kind of long so I will break it into parts. By the way, like Devan said, "you suck". I think the last title was actually better.

6Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Fri Sep 13, 2013 5:30 pm

YuGi Guru

YuGi Guru

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Yeah, a definitely bad title and kind of reminds me of Yugi. At first, I didn't know this was a fan-fiction until I clicked it. The importance of the title is to grab the reader's attention.

7Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:20 pm

Dudeguy809

Dudeguy809

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Title wasn't that bad, just thought it was gonna be yugioh, was all XP Didn't see it was Misc.

8Kings Game Empty Re: Kings Game Sat Sep 14, 2013 8:08 pm

Diabetic Panda

Diabetic Panda

Kings Game EFS6eLa

Great, write a story and get complaints about title. Sigh, fine, I won't use English Literature titles anymore. T_T Especially ones that relate to the story later on. Anyways, sorry for it being long. Chapter 3 will be out soon, and it'll be a tab bit slower. And for the title... I don't know. Help me out! I even asked for help from you title critics! But I got nothing! So please PM me something better. Thanks for reading?

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